Silhouette
During my school experience in Clyde Quay School, i had the privilage of observing a peotry writing lesson.
The exercise: Finish a peom starting with "as the moon wakes".
I decided to write one too...
tell me wad u think!
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As the moon wakes, all is silhouette
The lady is red appears in my head
I cant see her face but know does my heart
her beauty and grace is beyond disgrace
Oh do I long for beauty and grace
Oh how I desire to adore her face
Yet glimpses i get as short as a breath
of beauty and grace beyond disgrace
Her shiny hair flows like the oceans
Her glowing skin excites like a flame
You beckon for me yet meet we cannot
For all is silhouette, the girl of my dreams...
The exercise: Finish a peom starting with "as the moon wakes".
I decided to write one too...
tell me wad u think!
=)
--------------------------------------------
As the moon wakes, all is silhouette
The lady is red appears in my head
I cant see her face but know does my heart
her beauty and grace is beyond disgrace
Oh do I long for beauty and grace
Oh how I desire to adore her face
Yet glimpses i get as short as a breath
of beauty and grace beyond disgrace
Her shiny hair flows like the oceans
Her glowing skin excites like a flame
You beckon for me yet meet we cannot
For all is silhouette, the girl of my dreams...
man you sounded like Shakespeare!
ReplyDeletenice poem :)
Heya, it's great to have a common passion : ) Just let me know when you wanna meet up. I realise that although we are both heading to OZ around the same time for the holidays, our itinerary are total opposites.
ReplyDeleteOn a different note, I am starting my practical at Northland Kindergarten tomorrow for three weeks (unpaid) but I am sure the time spent with these children will be worth it.
Have an awesome holiday!
ohhh..you have got..huurrmmm..
ReplyDelete-repitition
-rhyme
-simile
-free structure..no word order..
-personafication
-metaphor
what else? hurmm..
*hv just had a session on poetry*
nice one, by the way..
WOW... THAT'S BEAUTIFUL!!
ReplyDeletewhen are u gonna write a poem to me? lol
ReplyDeleteit's a beautiful poem dude!
I'll be blowed! Golly! That came from you? :)
ReplyDeleteIt's mysterious. It's beautiful. I mean it.
J
Thanks for the encouragement, guys!
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I really feel flattered & i shall write more...
p/s: I shall write u a poem for ur birthday, Rev...
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It's a nice one though I know nothing about writing poem. Does this apply to the Chinese girls you met in the club too? *WiNK*
ReplyDeletebeautiful~
ReplyDeletei always adore ppl who cn write poem ... cos think i dun hv the talent... huhu keep on writing koko'!~
thanks, Jess!
ReplyDeletethanks, Fa!
but i dun think it applies to any girl...
it applies to a girl...
the girl of my dreams...
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awesome mate....
ReplyDeletea great poem...
write moreeeeeeee~
thanks, Nick!
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interesting post u have there!
ReplyDeletecheers mate!
glad you like it...
ReplyDeletei do too...
=D